Story-Telling: The Pitch

Title: "The Meeting" or "Due date" or something like that.

Genre: Drama

After finally coming up with an idea I was able to develop it and come up with this 25 word pitch:

"An expectant father rushes to be at his fiancée's side, but will recent conflicts destroy hopes of this being the happiest day of his life?"

or to be super short

"Relationship on the rocks and a baby on the way"

Outline:

An expectant father rushes to the hospital after hearing that his fiancée has gone into labour. After arriving at the delivery room he is saddened to hear that, as a result of recent conflicts, she does not want him in there. He heads to the waiting room where his sister is sitting. The two wait in an awkward silence until she pipes up and explains that she thinks what he did was wrong (without saying what he did). He decides he doesn't want to listen to her and leaves. He thinks about what he has done as he walks down the long corridors, it upsets him. He goes to the vending machine, the machine isn't working (more conflict, cliché). He is upset, angry and confused. He breaks down. Over the tannoy he is called to the delivery room. He goes in only to find that his fiancée has given birth without him. Will the birth of their son bring the two young parents back together?

Character:

• Expectant father
• Sister
• Mother and child (not seen, only heard)

Goal:

• Be at the birth and meet new born son
• Fix relationship with the mother

Conflict:

• The mother doesn't want him in the delivery room
• The sister isn't making the situation any easier
• He doesn't know what to do

Change:

• His opinion of his sister and her opinion of him
• The relationship between him and his fiancée
• He accepts that he was wrong

Character Profiles

Expectant Father:

• Name: Dylan Sharp
• Age: 20-25
• Occupation: Unemployed
• Nationality: British
• Hometown: Maidstone
• Siblings: 1- Rachel Sharp
• Height: About 5 foot 11, 5 foot 12
• Where's glasses (stereotype: indicates some intelligence)
• Costume design: Wearing black trousers and a red t-shirt (favourite colour). Covered up with a dark jacket. Dark shoes. Overall dark theme.
• Flaws: Doesn't like others telling him what to do. Struggles to open up about his feelings.
• Best quality: Deep down he is actually a really nice guy who just wants to be an amazing dad.
• Speech patterns: repeats himself a lot.

Sister:

• Name: Rachel Sharp
• Age: 18-23
• Occupation: Customer Service Advisor (people trust her opinion of things)
• Nationality: British
• Hometown: Maidstone
• Siblings: 1- Dylan Sharp
• Height: Shorter than Dylan
• Costume design: Bright and colourful
• Flaws: Always say's the wrong thing at the wrong time. Doesn't know when something should be left until later on.
• Best quality: Honest (although sometimes too honest). Kind.

Locations

Waiting room

Hospital corridor

Reference Scene: Knocked Up Birth Scene