Documentary: Script- Draft 1

As part of the pre-production for my documentary unit, I had to produce a script for my group's documentary: Pledge For Veg.

SCRIPT: DRAFT 1

Before writing the script, I looked at all the information I already had about the documentary and the people involved, which included websites, leaflets and a transcript of an interview with our two main characters. I then used this information to put an outline together so I knew what direction the script would go in.

After doing this I began putting a script together using our story outline and script outline. I started by writing narration, based on what I thought might happen whilst we were filming. Then I wrote in quotes from our characters so that when we are filming, we would have an idea of what we would like them to or what we think that might say again. On parts of the script I used italics to add what I thought people might say, or what direction I thought that part of the script might go in.

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After showing the script to Helen, this was the feedback I received:
- The problem was introduced too early
- Change the order so that Jamie (one of our characters) is introduced right at the start
- Think about using the location to help set the story up
- Think about what the ending might be: positive? negative?
- Try to find some more contacts
- Think about visuals as well as audio, not just audio

Some of Helen's notes on the draft

The next step is to use this feedback, and group feedback to work on a second draft.